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I will love you forever.

Here I lay lost in my mind. The mirrors all covered, see not my demise.
The skin is pail, the eyes turned black; I ask to God what the reason is for that.
My wife she cries, it comes and goes. I’m not quite sure the words it troughs.
I lay here lost, in my mind. I hope for sure it's not all time.
I call to God, I say his prayer, and I tell him that I know he’s there.
My wife and child, they hold my hands, as I am lead to the promise land.
Cry not for me my pain is gone, in heaven now where I belong.
The mirrors uncovered, eyes no longer black.
Cry not for me, time moves to fast.
Enjoy your life and have a blats.
I’ll see you soon, at the gates.
I had to go no time to waste.
 I will love you forever.
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David Carlson More than 1 year ago
Its not about how its put out there. The pain inside is more then a person can handle at times. Its men't to simply say that no mater what, I will always love the ones around me. In the pain of death or, pain of life. This is who I am!
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roger houlding More than 1 year ago
Good composition
Pinki Kumari More than 1 year ago
Concept v.nice. . Thinking power u put up for poem is v.excellent. U did great job. But i feel by mistake u did spelling mistake. Do not repeay friend.
Denise Rodriguez More than 1 year ago
Awesome keep writing...
Mary Pellegrin More than 1 year ago
Great job~!
Cammie Casarez More than 1 year ago
good job
Quandriscer Lewis More than 1 year ago
this is not that bad, it's says to me that your speaking of how you feel about the person you love
Tamala Tiedemann More than 1 year ago
I enjoyed your poem. You did have a few grammatical and punctuation errors so just be sure to proof read. Aside from that, well done!
David Carlson More than 1 year ago
Thank you.
Alexander Rodd More than 1 year ago
This is an interesting poem, and it has a lot of potential, but you need to proofread more carefully. For instance, you wrote pail (bucket) when you should have said pale (white). Also, when mentioning God, you need to capitalize the pronouns, i.e., "I say His prayer", not "I say his prayer".
David Carlson More than 1 year ago
I'll remember that.Thank you!
Nick Brockbank More than 1 year ago
I do with Brandy's words
David Carlson More than 1 year ago
I don't understand what you are saying.
Brandy Werczynski More than 1 year ago
With a little work this would be powerful
Rebecca G More than 1 year ago
Lovely feeling in this poem, makes me want to read on and captures the essence in a short space. A slight lack of detail with spelling etc. If polished up would deliver the strong message that is obviously there.
David Carlson More than 1 year ago
Thank you very much,I will work on details and spelling more next time.
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