Eternal Bliss
by
John Lowe
The little man in the wall asked me to fly.
Staring with a puzzled look, I asked why.
To find the truth of it you must go out.
I shook my head clearing it of all doubt.
To take that blind step forward is scary.
But, I have been broken down and weary.
So, stepping ahead I did indeed then do.
Falling, hitting the ground, splatting into goo.
Never even getting to say my final goodbyes.
From the hard ground, my soul began to rise.
As I passed him by, I asked why did you do this?
Ah, he said, what I have given you is eternal bliss.
Staring with a puzzled look, I asked why.
To find the truth of it you must go out.
I shook my head clearing it of all doubt.
To take that blind step forward is scary.
But, I have been broken down and weary.
So, stepping ahead I did indeed then do.
Falling, hitting the ground, splatting into goo.
Never even getting to say my final goodbyes.
From the hard ground, my soul began to rise.
As I passed him by, I asked why did you do this?
Ah, he said, what I have given you is eternal bliss.
This poem has been reported for abuse and is under review.
- About my poem
- Review this poem
Poetry.com 4.7 out of 5 based on 105 votes.
 |
good writing
Sophy
|
 |
Again you amaze me, John. You really should look into getting published. My poem "Thank You" was published by poetry.com 14 yrs. ago. You have such an amazing gift that should be shared with more than just your fellow poets. I know there's a market for your poetry. Anyone who has ties to the military and even civs.would go ape over your works. I would love for you to check me out and maybe exchange ideas/stories. Stay strong and keep up the awesome work. You never know who will read your poems and find the right path. May God Bless you and Keep you. Rose
|
 |
perfect...last stanza is amazing
|
 |
And surprising!
|
 |
and amazing ....
|
 |
nice john
|
|
Words can not describe what I get and feel when I read your poetry. For words do not do it justice. You are a true poet....
|
 |
That was so good! I really loved it! You're such a great poet. If you get the time plz check out some of my poems and tell if they're good or not.
|
|
simply amazing........
|
 |
your talent is very apparent, but more than that we, your readers can feel your passion.
|
|
very nice poem you can feel the emotions.
|
I..am utterly speechless by this poem and you're writing in general. It's just so good, absolutely amazing.
|
 |
pain
|
I adore everything written by this poet. I can actually FEEL the pain. The raw emotion. The love for country. the love for home, the love for comrades and the conflict of loving what causes such grief..... again I am speechless. well almost.
|
 |
This contains great imagery, a very good story within a poem with incredible rhyming and depth. I love it!
|
 |
Great imagination
|
.
|
|
So different, and thought provoking; what real art is meant to be. Written from the perspective of the soul leaving the body - nice! Have a look at my first offering please.
|
 |
GREAT POEM BROTHA, EXCEPT GODS WILL AND HAVE PEACE. THNKS FOR SHAREING GREAT!!!
|
 |
Super Art!
|
 |
well written and well expressed...i want eternal bliss
|
 |
I see so much more to u. Its nice to see a man that isn't just about.
his millimeters. (Ammo) LOL. Any lady would be lucky to have you.
Every one of your poems are exceptional.
|
 |
You paint a great picture with your words that show the pain and despair you want to get across to the public . Keep them coming because everyone needs someone to turn to. Just maybe you will lead someone down the right path in life through your poetry.
|
|
Wow...you have excellent imagery!
|
|
creativity at its best
|
.JPG?1348103967)
.jpg?1358880198)
