MAGIC WORLD
by
who am I
WE ARE IN A MAGIC WORLD
JUST IMAGINE
AND WE ARE DANCING TOGETHER AT THE MOON
EVEN THE STARS ALSO
THE CLOUDS WERE TAKING US
AROUND THE WORLD
THE PLANETS WERE THE GATES TO REACH THE WORLD
WE ARE TOGETHER AND FOREVER
LETS GO MY ANGEL
JUST IMAGINE
AND WE ARE DANCING TOGETHER AT THE MOON
EVEN THE STARS ALSO
THE CLOUDS WERE TAKING US
AROUND THE WORLD
THE PLANETS WERE THE GATES TO REACH THE WORLD
WE ARE TOGETHER AND FOREVER
LETS GO MY ANGEL
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Poetry.com 2.5 out of 5 based on 4 votes.
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I agree with you, clouds are drifting us.
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Needs a bit more strengthening with emotion and feeling.
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I'm a big dreamer, so something like this seemed right up my alley. I understand being "out there" with your work, and such things attract me, but towards a the end it sort of lost me. I liked the concept though
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Dancing "With" the moon would sound better and more poetic than dancing "At" the moon. These are just thoughts and could have been made into a nice poem.
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