Winter Dance
by
Susan Meehan
On the day that death took leave,
Leafs fell from amber covered trees,
When autumn turns to ice
And frigid winds bend,
Death will surely pay its price.
Its soul was sold
To turn back the cold
Gripping tightly, had no chance
Written in bloody romance
Consuming eternally, lips of red
Black mask to hide
Bitter dance of dread.
Selling souls
Compelling roles
Here you hide in masks of dye
Death will seek you
It will find you.
Searching,
Lurching toward your end.
Leafs fell from amber covered trees,
When autumn turns to ice
And frigid winds bend,
Death will surely pay its price.
Its soul was sold
To turn back the cold
Gripping tightly, had no chance
Written in bloody romance
Consuming eternally, lips of red
Black mask to hide
Bitter dance of dread.
Selling souls
Compelling roles
Here you hide in masks of dye
Death will seek you
It will find you.
Searching,
Lurching toward your end.
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good i thik it is mor clear dont need my thought or trying to understand
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An old poem I wrote. I thought about editing it and adding to it, but I felt like that would take away from what I felt when I wrote it so long ago. This was my feelings, my emotions at that time and I would not have that changed just to make this a "better" poem. :)
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keep it up!!!
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i like the vocabulary simple for anyone to understand but complex to make it well written
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I can totally see this being on a Tim Burton short stop motion animation :) I love the similes and symbolism about Death. Very well written! Thank You for sharing!
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Hello Susan, your poem is very nice, I enjoyed reading it. However, you need to redo some rhyming, epecailly in first and the last parts of your poem. There are just a couple words, that need to be dealt with. Otherwise, great job.
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nice try to express the eternal reality of death which will consume one day, but what will remain is the eternal love you spraed over the souls in your life time..........
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