broken sentences
by
Troy Kaneer
Fractured thoughts,
Broken sentences,
Unclear messages,
Random words,
Pointless speech,
This is poetry,
I think not.
Broken sentences,
Unclear messages,
Random words,
Pointless speech,
This is poetry,
I think not.
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Poetry.com 3.8 out of 5 based on 8 votes.
You realize that poetry doesnt fit into a comfortable neat little box right? The moment that happens poetry is dead. The purpose of poetry is to inspire FEELING not logic. A great poem should be open to interpretation to the reader. If you only think "real poetry" consists of sophmoric rhyme schemes, i.e( ending subsequent sentences with only words that rhyme together) then you're dead wrong.
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Great
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I agree with Evan M. Your message is lost in these short, abstract sentences spliced into a poetic format. You have a point to make but it needs more words. A basic sentence needs at least a subject and a verb in order to be interesting. Without this revision, your "poem" will remain choppy and flat.
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5 stars for the sentiment - not the poem - or I'd be contradicting myself :D x
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sweet you are totlaly right
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I love your subject and actually wrote a poem with a similar sentiment, but I'm not sure this shorty has much to offer beyond the obvious. Maybe you could think about extending it into something even more creative and powerful.
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I like the simple truths conveyed in this poem.
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short and sweet, but says a lot
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